Mouth of the Cave

Trifecta Word Challenge with the 3rd definition: 

Even on those January mornings when she woke to bright sun, facing the day was staring into the mouth of a cave: the light couldn’t penetrate that yawning darkness, the dank tedium of having to get up and get dressed. A daily obligation that as her arthritic body weakened, seemed less obligatory – it was easier not to get dressed at all.

So even on sunny winter mornings, she refused to cross the cave’s gaping threshold. She stayed outside in the sun – she stayed in bed, dozing the day away, until the sun flickered crimson between the bare trees outside her bedroom window.


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15 Responses to Mouth of the Cave

  1. Sandra Crook says:

    There was some great imagery in this – I felt I could have been there.

  2. I’ve had a day or two that felt like that!

  3. jody says:

    sad, but true. This is the beginning of when people make a decision to head towards the end – when a warm home begins to feel like a cold, base cave. Your words (dank, tedium, threshold) bring us to that place.

  4. Mary McAvoy says:

    Sandra,
    Exceptional writing.
    Mary

  5. steph says:

    You really captured that hopeless feeling – the yawning darkness and the dank tedium – great phrases. I want to sit at the edge of her bed and try to cheer her up.

  6. Anne says:

    Your words bring to mind many familiar feelings. It’s a difficult situation to be in yet even the best of us knows we need to conquer the fear and head on…

  7. Draug419 says:

    I have my mornings like this, and I don’t even have old age to blame it on. ): You described the feeling so well!

  8. mairzeebp says:

    It’s like you painted a picture. I liked this, very much.

  9. I heartily agree with her cravings. I would hibernate all winter if I could.

  10. rashmenon says:

    Very vivid description. Nice work indeed.

  11. kgwaite says:

    Really beautiful, Sandra.

  12. lumdog says:

    A beautifully written piece.

  13. Atreyee says:

    Sad that illness can be so debilitating that staying in bed seems a better option than to live life.Wonderfully written:-)

  14. This imagery felt lush and your character very intimate. A very thoughtful piece.

    I’m off to follow you.

    New to Trifecta.

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